Once upon a time,
there was a boy.
Whenever the rain comes,
his inner face was
Gloomy, and Dark.
He believed
Somewhere out there, there must be a sun.
But
It was never seen.
Once upon a time,
there was a boy.
He wanted a umbrella
which may clear his life.
The rain kept falling.
And nothing could cover him.
He was all wet.
Suddenly, he noticed.
Only thing he need was,
not a sun,
not an umbrella,
But a partner.
Whom
he can walk on his faith along.
Excellent poem! I like the pacing, and the free verse structure works well. Very metaphorical. How about you clean it up a bit (formatting, verb tenses, spacing) and add a picture or two (or use pixlr.com to write the poem ON an image). Have some fun with this.
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